Show 6 ' Sunday Bloming- - -- ?TI)eSa!t fake Tribune -- Jffieia©wmedll (Cidn'eeii!'' IIDirniiiis ' November 3 1910 ofi IIDii’eaiinni i dnstrustbr (Points Gut JJanqer (fn Zliis tjpe of Short Story-Telli- ILoye ©fi OnnMneini Mias - ' DO©!© mu ILeadlmg ng Salit Lalieir’s Sitory ‘Muted Melody A Tribune Short Story By Leda N J ensen " - " Salt Lake City Caroline Baines was Just a little tired as she wiped her hands on a towel and sat down ‘There waj a smell of spier la her small lmmacu late kitchen and a look of Satisfaction In het eyes as she surveyed the tall Jar from whose edge peeped round circles of' the molasses cookies she had Just finished baking From the' garden outside came grunts and squeals of childish laughter punctuated frequently by Tim's hearty chuckle The sound of the garden shears would cease occasionally while Timmy’s adolescent" quaver would Join the chorus shouting "Atta girl! Ride ’em cowboy!" The warm midsummer breeze gently disturbed the curtains at the window and enveloped the woman’s shoulders In a cloak of refreshment for which -- she- was grateful - 'Caroline“was'gaflng'at-thhcooki- r Jar and on its glazed surface unfolded before her the panorama of her life That Jar had been her mother’s It had stood for years In the cool dimness of the cellar way under the stairs at home At Its fragrant well she had found consolation for all her childish troubles If she had bruised her finger or bumped her head her mother had always said "Never mind dear come on let’s get us a cookie shall we?” Caroline had been a lonely child born In her parents’ middle yqars She had been extremely sensitive to the fact that every child In the neighborhood had baby brothers and sisters Adults and children Mike unconsciously kept this cruel situation before her One picture stayed long on the cookie Jar and the muscles of Ca& line’s throat tightened as she gazed at It She saw herself a tawny-haire-d scrap ol a thing sitting in the sun onjhe front doorstep She was trying to subdue the frantic wrlgglings of a gray kitten long enough to Imprison Its fore paws in the sleeves of her doll’s b'esf dress "Good morning Caroline" Mrs Smith had paused just inside with her through the gone the gate "you seem to be having years trouble with your child” Caroline straightened shook her"Yes’m" Caroline could still hear self slightly and brushed a hand across misty eyes She turned and her polite reply "Bart must have a called through the open window stummick ache He just won’t hold "Timmy— be sure and keep the still this morning" sweet peas in one bunch and the " corn lilies and daisies in another” "Qhhlsname Is Bart is it?” “O K Mom” her son’s voice Mrs Smith smiled as she ad- drifted back husky with laughter vanced "Come on out and see Dad! He’s "Yes’m It’s Bart today tomorthe best bucker in town” row it will be Caroline” But Caroline was already far "You’re a funny girl” Mrs Smith away Another picture had appeared on the jar a picture of Caropatted Caroline’s head "Could you line West as she had been that day Is? tell me where Mary Patterson long ago The great singing masHer mother told me she was here ter had come to their rock house and told her flattered parents "She and to come and get her She is Is perfect!She has the build she to tend Billy while I go to” club” the throat has of an opera singer kitCaroline’s eyes had left the Hers Is the silver voice It has no held ten He was all but forgotten verbatto It is straight and clear You will know it is a voice of un- 'quiet by one small hand firmly usual beauty when you hear her planted In his middle "No’m she’s do ‘Ermine’” not here Mary wouldn’t want to At the small table the woman’s She hates send Billy anyway The curve of her face softened Obediently Caroline had looked at sensitive slightly sad lips grew babies she told me so She’s got reflection and had stood quite the rewith and her Is sick and tender she lovely home so many at even when the flashing shears’ still a held Her peneyes membering tired of ’em She told me so Mrs had outlined a lower cold hardness sweetness Were sive just yet they ' breast curve her Smith!” Hope had dawned in that against a little hungry “Ermine” had been She had loved that operetta Carochildish treble and gained momenher first success line could still feel the hush which Always she would remember the tum as Caroline had continued "But greeted the final bars of "Ermine’s” satin and blue gown of gold velvet I’ll tend him for you I’ll Just love lullaby Into cradled empty arms over billowed had which A gown she had gazed reluctant to share to tend him I’ll tend him as good It had been so low a great hoop this melody Yet strangely it had as good and you won’t have to in the neck that it only caught at been shared more completely than and the shoulders do of her the points Mary pay me a dime like you she had ever known for on every -- - curve of her young breast was exthat amusement cither” With the silver note she had etched a bit of posed How she had flushed as she the dream which filled her eyes swept Mrs Smith’s face hope died so much of reflection the caught let couldn’t the two verses and the I Caroline During with and tried bareness "Why widespread chorus of that drawn-oa shield hauntingly a know to don’t make hands tend you Billy you head had raised but the girl’s whissong she had me Cover "Oh! up” thing about babies” once Her smile had touched big "Mother would pered shaken of the face like a kiss With it had Tim’s Quiet had taken place moment this! like1 It me let never appear a promise until then withheld vibrant excitement of a gone sinful!” is before a quiet that warned "But and he knew that he could some day The little French dressmaker had as “ ’Tis never a sin my child make her dreams come true I love Billy” Caroline had said smiled though ho other argument were necessary Thdq Mrs Smith laughed! “Bless the child! Loving them isn’t enough” In the picture on the cookie jar Caroline saw a small girl spring blue oyes erect fists clenched blazing a gray kitten that scamvoice Editor’s Note: All manuscript submitted to The tribune’s pered away She heard a him tears "Loving with contest for writers must be accompanied by the signed certifitense cry1 cate below This certificate can be clipped from your paper the way I do is enough— ’tis I say! and signed or you may copy It on your typewriter The Tribune A square angry foot stamped All she hates babies reservea the right to reject any manuscript right go get Mary and I love ’em but go get her! by a signed certificate " CERTIFICATE AUTHOR’S I wouldn’t tend Billy even if you d I I wouldnt a quarter me" give and Some day I will have State Clty babies lots - of ’em— one with and hair hair “and red black hair — and— Street Number away— I hate Another figure appeared in the saying © picture Caroline’s mother Date in a shocked vaice "Caroline—!of Caroline West! I am ashamed 1 hereby certify that the short story Inclosed titled this you! Apologize to Mrs Smith very- minute!” is submitted Some time later when the sob7 rockcomposition that no to The Sait Lake Tribune as bing had ceased and the old other story ing chair had stopped creaking part of the same has been taken or eopled from any the double burden it had borne or publication and that the entire composition has never been In any Caroline’s mother had said There printed or published before In any other publication or now never mind dear' let's go and form from — -- 1 forth get acookie shall awe?” hurt finger Tho Salt Lake Trlhune In the event that this story Is accepted It hadn’t been it had for publication will bo accepted by me at evidence of good that day nor a lost kitten faith that this Is an original composition as stated above been a bruised heart the old cookie upon to jar’s contents were calledresolution console and the firm Signed born in that heated moment had Attention of all amateur writer submitting manuscripts In The Salt Lake Tribune’s Short Story" contest It directed to the — WHAT CAUSES fact that manuscripts will not be returned unless stamps to oover postage are inclosed Neither will The Tribune enter epilepsy? can-on- d - the-eye- - ut-dimly ’ ’ -- hyper-romant- - -- - - ut Notice to Writers ait go oh-h-h- -h v - under ‘ - ’ - “Ah-h-h-- this” starry-eye- d young r' 9 into any correspondence- - concerning disposal of such manuscripts Criticism is made of each manuscript received and this Is returned to tho writer along with the manuscript If the story Is found not acceptable providing return postage has been sent blankly Very sure now the child nodded “Urn-huhead Lovey— 00 — ’’ And then she held out her arms Caroline caught her quickly to her and buried her face In the baby’s soft neck Tim cleared his throat and said “How about those cookies Mom?” A few minutes later Caroline r called neighbor “We are going away for a little while would you mind if we took the babies with us?” her madonna had been like the complete fulfillment of Caroline’s dreams Any vague regret she might have felt at the memory of a career had faded away and was gone And like a beautiful breath-takin- g dream it was suddenly gone leaving a woman like a spent little ghost with a ravaged soul and a bitter mouth A spent little ghost who had- passed - her days caressing such things as small wornout shoes and who arose each night at a certain time to pause bewildered and lost beside two diminutive empty beds For a long time the cookie jar done The “What’s his name?” “Kim” lisped the baby Timmy gurgled rapturously “And who is this?" he demanded looking at Caroline The grave-eye- d young lady promptly' put a chubby thumb in her mouth took it out again and surprisingly said “Lovey” “Love y?” Caroline echoed braces again” The next picture Caroline gazed at in rapture recapturing the greatest joy she had ever known Tim coming through the door tossing his hat and lunch' pail on a bench outside his face a study of concern “Well Cara” he had said “what did the doctor say when you saw him today?” t A’ “Gee I I taught Judy today” Planting himself firmly before his father and grasping the middle button of the big man’s shirt he demanded of the small feminine rider ed answered him “Tim Tim we’re going to have twins!” Tim had stared his mouth dropping open and then had gathered her into his arms with a boyish shout “Gosh! — Cara! — TWINS!" Then followed a time when a silver voice trilled through the neighborhood Lips smiled and people said My Caroline Baines is happy!” The two years that had slipped h” swallowed convulsively ’most forgot something “You’re right no woman should” Later Tim’s voice floated to Caroline in waves “She’s got her white-headboy all right but my God Doctor! Look at his feet!” Caroline didn’t need to look at the cookie jar to know what pictures flashed swiftly on the screen of its surface Doctors hospitals large iron braces on a little boy’s legs A new voice said “Now now Mrs Baines don’t cry You can throw away the braces put them in an ash can your little boy is now all right He may walk awkwardly for awhile but he will never need er-arr- eo- famA bepktet containing tha opinions of will subject Interesting on doctors tjiis ous reader b sept FREE whilt they lest to eny 535 Division writing to the Educational Y Dept N York New Avt fifth ' (Advertisement) ic of-th- e & - ' By Professor L A Quivey We promised one of the editor's that we would have something to say about the introspective and flashback methods of writing a story and here is our chance This particular editor had ho objection to the the story hutJiethQughtJhat-therewre-farlo- o - method 4f itcxactly-fitte- d ' of our published storles written in these ways many We had to admit that this was true but felt that the fact that each story of eyery week was chosen as the best in our estimation of all that we had on hand at the time would have to excuse the too frequent presly ence of this type of stories- -' Now here is another and again we this moment ’is at that’ on is one hand best the that It say ' There is no doubt as to the cause of so many amateur stories being written in this way for (1) it is the had stood empty in a corner most easily mastered and the easithat loved it s shunned by est to use of all methods (2) the Even now it reflected the sadness fact that a story is placed in the of lips' which had known sorrow-todeep for tears On it appeared past tends toward this' method and' a picture of the day Tim had found (3) in general any person recount- -' her kneeling by the open chest a past experience orally In real ing the twins' neatly folded which held life tfends to fall into this mood We Clothes" “ He had thetrnelghborT said that it Is theeasiest way but ' baby' by the hand She was crying as she held out a doll to Caroline is also the most difficult and if It “He felled down 'and bwoke her our writers would only realize how head” she had sobbed For a long very hard it is to do a story well minute' Caroline had hesitated then this way they would avoid its use had caught her breath and had drawn the child Into her arms — It is the way of the old person “There now— never mind dearjwfche ting-- o verhispast- “had comforted “Lefrr‘girand— sRtingandxumina is It also the way of experiences we?” make us some cookies shall the child and of the And In the picture on the cookie person It is closely allied with jar a big man had groped blindly for the door overdone sentiments feelings all Caroline gave a guilty start as For these reasons and passions couTim’s voice boomed “I’ve got a most to write a out here of people' attempting cowboys hungry pie Cara got anything to feed them?” story in this why will fall into the The woman’s voice filled with exaggeration of feelings and emolove “The cookie jar is full bring tions and become melodramatic them in” When one recognizes this failing “Oh boy!” came Timmy’s voice “Oh boy!” came two little echoes of writing by this method and And in they trooped Timmy first fights hard to avoid its faults 'he to fill his grimy hands Caroline’s an immense job in restraint on has heart swelled as she gazed at her his hands but he has the reward of a wee girl perched husband with precariously on his shoulders The putting out a very well told story child had Tim’s hair clutched so for this is one best ways 'if firmly with both hands that his he can avoid sensationalism emomost a at were pulled up eyebrows tionalism and sentimentalism The ridiculous angle giving him the apcareless person and the unlearned pearance of a startled and rather ferocious donkey about to bray person write only drivel when they This expression was emphatically MJ was by the old cookie try to use the restrospective the denied by the upward quirk of his jar real artist puts out some of his finand the delighted rumble in lips she had made her decision est work by this method The his throat At the big man’s side- looking amateur as a rule does badly with very small in comparison strode a it for he has not the training which little boy Although he Was tem- -' reer had come to be It was by will help him to avoid its faults line in dethroned the old cookie jar she had made her every porarily We that hand decision his the One day she had closed again therefore advise against its body especially clutched Tim’s trouser leg emaher eyes and had seen little heads promiscuous use leave it for those nated defiant possession bending over it little hands reachbetter trained in writing “Tim Baines how long has Jim’s ing down With a crpoked smile nose needed wiping?” Caroline had whispered brokenly Helpful Notes on This Story At the tone of mock severity in "Who wants to be an opera singer An anival does not have front Caroline’s voice a look of repentanyway?” She had known even as paws they are fore paws ant chagrin crossed Tim’s face and she had wept that it was the deciWe revised the author’s “ ‘Yes’m arm sion she wanted to make up quickly brought Jimmy’s Caroline remembered the feverish toward the object of rebuke CaroCaroline could hear herself politely line forestalled the attempt with days of packing after her marriage reply” to read as in the text The Tim had a job in the city and everya firm hand and took the young“still" was inserted to keep the contorto on had knee be ster One her thing shipped Jimmy’s thing time element straight not Caroline would trust to the tions were eloquent of his disgust railroad- As they drove away from that such a big boy must have his After “Apologies to Mrs Smith the old home town in the back seat nose wiped by a Woman Caroline this very minute” should have been of that' Model T Ford was the old scolded gently all the time “Jim One diverts Mrs Smith’s answer cookie jar Jim how many times must I tell the reader’s attention by not givIt didn’t seem long after that you that a gentleman never wipes his nose on his sleeve” though it had been two years On ing it the surface of the cookie jar apcame the muffled reAvoid sophistry It is sophistry tort between blows “Jimmy not peared a picture that she could to say that because God made the never forget and from it came voices gentleman Jimmy cowboy” bulebird blue a woman should be In the general laughter that folthat could never change A hospital room a doctor a nurse lind Tim lowed the child escaped to hang proud to give at least a hint that Tim’s voice tortured disembodied in worship on Tim’s trousers once she has mammillary glands It is “Doctor how much longer must more the logical fault of “non sequitur" this go on?” Timmy snorted sending' out a fine “Take down the hands they pro“I wish I knew Mr Baines" of cookie brown from crumbs spray “No woman should suffer like a mouth filled to capacity He test too mich!” is really very well m to-he- ’ ’ They entered the cemetery together their neighbors’ children and their only son beside them On one side of a twin stone marker the sweet peas were laid up be- — fore Caroline’s vision acalling tiny brown-eyed girl and on the other side of ‘ dictionary gives “if” as a substitute for “whether” but it is Use not at all the best usage “whether” where there is the element of choice is used to indicate short elapses of time or thought Of the three forms denoting lapses (not one dash but two the or more in type) and dashes show more a sudden breaking off with also a possible lapse of time the asterisks show a longer lapse than the periods with perhaps a marked turning of thought not a breaking off the periods are used for a short lapse of time or a less marked turning of the thought In writing in past time there is the following management of tenses The simple past tense is used for actions which are occurring at the time of the story being told in the past the past perfect is used to In- dicate both actions which were past at that past time and those which were perfected the future perfect is used for actions which are to occur following the time concerning which one is writing Occasionally where the story i short we shall be glad to give you the more minor technique of story writing for we find that many of very badly need it our-writer- s — so representative of a small" lad Standing close beside them young Timmy read the words “Caroline and Barlett Baines— age two— 1927-19Caroline gazed after her son as he started down the path a tot on either side of him and quietly said ’How he adores those babies it has been a wonderful thing for all of us that we have been able to love other people’s children Tim" !gh!ened quickly about It s what keeps us sane Thank God riothing has been Cara able to take away ouf capacity to love!" ’red-hair- ed 29 DOiiTBE DOSSED BY YOUR LAXAT1VE-RELIE- VE Constipation this mopern way 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